A learned man came to me once
By Stephen Crane
A learned man came to me once.
He said, "I know the way, -- come."
And I was overjoyed at this.
Together we hastened.
Soon, too soon, were we
Where my eyes were useless,
And I knew not the ways of my feet.
I clung to the hand of my friend;
But at last he cried, "I am lost.
A strong boy laughed at me once
By Ryan Hegna
A strong boy laughed at me once
I asked, "Why do you laugh? -- stop."
And he was surprised by this.
All too quickly he stirred
Swift, so swift, moved him
Where his fist were like rocks,
And I was lost in waves of his might
I fell from the grasp of the boy
And I cried to him, "We are same."
Perhaps cover some of his verse in the slow, rhythmic manner he meant for it to be delivered. You shared some really interesting things about him, including some information I didn't know, like he is credited by some for having started the modern movement in poetry. How so?
ReplyDeleteIn what ways was he the starter of different literary movements? What were some of these movements?
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ReplyDeleteYou did a really good job of staying with the form of the poem but I think that you added a little different style in the rhythm and flow of it. Some of the way you phrased things didn't really make it sound as smooth as the original but I still liked your poem a lot though.
ReplyDeleteThis is a really interesting poem that follows the form very well. I agree with Morgan that parts of it weren't as smooth as the original but you made it work out really well.
ReplyDeleteThis was a good poem Ryan. I really liked it a lot. I thought that it imitated the author's style really well and you added yourself into it nice job!
ReplyDeleteIt didn't seem quite as smooth as the original, but I like the syntax and the patterns, and overall just how it sounded. It was a good topic and easy to understand. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteYour inspiration for your poem was really cool. It seemed like it was different from your poet's inspiration, but I liked it. Good job with your rhyming too!
ReplyDeleteI liked the level of thought you put into your emulation, though I did like the original draft better. I know how easy it can be to replicate an open poem, but you seemed to have put a lot of effort and time into it. Good job Ryan.
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ReplyDeleteA very cool poem and it was incredibly similar to Crane's. The style was very different and it makes me wonder if this style was difficult to emulate. Awesome poem.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job on getting the syntax just like Stephen Crane's poem. I thought it was parallel for the most part. Good job.
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ReplyDeleteThis is a really good poem, but I think that when you emulated it, you tried so hard to make it fit the format that some of the meaning might have got lost in the syntax. I still really like the topic of it, and the second and lasts lines of yours made me laugh. Good job.
ReplyDeleteThis is particularly interesting in how you went to an entirely different theme, the whole bully scene, and drew upon that for the topic. I like the humor. I hope that was intended, but if I'm wrong, I'm sorry. I just liked how the poem revolved around such a contrasting topic from the one you used as a model.
ReplyDeleteI thought that this poem was really great. I liked the topic you wrote about and how you got it across. Also it seemed very similar to the original poem.
ReplyDeleteI thought it was an interesting topic to write about, and I thought you did a good job imitating your poet with syntax.
ReplyDeleteNice job Ryan! I really liked this poem! It actually kind of made me laugh:) I don't really know if it was intended to be funny, but it did. I think it flowed really well, and the descriptions were reallyyyy good! Nice job! :)
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