Author's Note: This is an existential poem which I wrote in response to the Truman Show. I know that the syntax isn't perfect but that was kind of the point.
Life, so perfect
too perfect
An unrealistic reality
seeming to be genuine
yet seems so artificial
The people, so kind
too kind
Their ear-to-ear smiles
beaming at me with welcome
yet with a hint of strain
The world, so beautiful
too beautiful
The environment around me
so unbelievably admirable
yet seems so masterfully created
Myself, so praised
too praised
Attention from everyone
so very convenient
yet seems so intentional
Everything, so perfect
too perfect
Life, so perfect
too perfect
An unrealistic reality
seeming to be genuine
yet seems so artificial
The people, so kind
too kind
Their ear-to-ear smiles
beaming at me with welcome
yet with a hint of strain
The world, so beautiful
too beautiful
The environment around me
so unbelievably admirable
yet seems so masterfully created
Myself, so praised
too praised
Attention from everyone
so very convenient
yet seems so intentional
Everything, so perfect
too perfect
I really liked this piece. I also liked how you repeated yourself, but didn't overdo it. I think when you repeat yourself sometimes, it doesn't turn out well at all but in this one, it really worked. I also liked the idea of his life being too good to be true. Nice job!
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